I see lightning flashing across the plain, starting fires every once in a while, immediately being extinguished by the rain. As I look across the vast expanse of land from my perch on my horse, I see a tornado spinning round and round. Then all of a sudden, I see an invisible barrier racing towards me, flattening all the grass and shrubs as it sweeps its way across the plain, like a shockwave. About a minute before it hits me, I realize that, with a start, that it is a GIGANTIC gust of wind. I brace myself, just waiting for the wind to hit me, trapped like a cornered animal huddling and cowering, waiting for the inevitable. Suddenly it hits me and my steed, almost knocking me from the saddle. I lift my eyes to the sky and see, ever growing closer, a huge, monstrous thunderhead. If I embellish the cloud, I can just imagine a great cathedral, with billowing flags, and stone gargoyles staring mincingly down at me.
Also I made out columns and arches and doors. The air around me is heavy, still, like a colossal blanket, struggling to smother me. I hear a sound like a train rolling along the tracks, and unfortunately just as loud. Well I guess I had better go back home to report the storm to my family and, most likely, go down to the storm cellar, waiting for the approaching storm to slowly pass.
NOTE: This is a good English paper because it has lots of details and it has very good word usage.
Nice but needs a little guildens
Very nice but what is is talking about and \"i see\" is used to many times. needs to be more straight to the point if there is one, and less redundant. otherwise very pretty imagry and well writen.
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