I suppose you are quite disorientated person, because the direction of my essay is clear - money and sex have become the main priorities of humanity, which leads to loosing of many good qualities and erasing the face of humans in general - turning them in a sort of machines.As to the length of the essay - i think it is quite perfect, in case you are restricted in 300 words.
- 23/06/2004
- 12:25:33
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
That's an interesting description of processes from the point of view of science. But I personally prefer living flowers more. Because I can\'t see anything beautiful in death...why should it be exposed? This only reminds us for theshortage of life. And also...imagine that flowers were humans..and humans - flowers. Would you enjoy it...your skeleton to be dried and used for arrangements...But the essay is good.
- 22/06/2004
- 14:26:08
- Score: 5 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
It's a nice work. You follow the poem step by step, analyzing it's parts. Your way of writing reminds me of an old map, and if you follow the instructions enclosed..it will lead you to the treasure.
- 22/06/2004
- 13:57:43
- Score: 42 out of 44 people found this comment useful.
It's nice that you are an anxious parent and love your child so much. But have you ever thought that you won't be able always to protect your kid? That he'll not always stand below your wing? By 'protecting' him from seeing all the evil and bad sides of life you'll just create an illusion of perfection of the world. And when the time, when you son will have to deal everything on his own, comes..he will be absolutely helpless. So television in a way has its positive effects as to the point that it's better to watch the artificial violence than to experience it unprotected on you own, and of course take notes. As to the maniacs, that have caused pain, inspired by tv programs, I suppose the fault is in their mental activity more than in the television.
- 20/06/2004
- 05:44:36
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I like your essay very much. It's one of the descriptive works, which make you feel and think. Feel the water...the wind...become a part of the nature. Think about the changes in history of people, and experience a kind of nostalgy for the times that had passed away.It's unfortunate how some people just can't open the doors of their hearts, stop thinking and start feeling...So my advice is to pay attention not to stop doing what you've started.
- 20/06/2004
- 05:30:14
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
First, I am not a teacher. I study in a Foreign Language High School and i am 17 years old. I think it is quite acceptable for me to have grammar and spelling mistakes, as my native language is Bulgarian. As to the 'commentary' ...commentary is giving opinion. essay is a way to express thoughts as well.. so i can't find your problem.
- 19/06/2004
- 10:53:37
- Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.