Yes the essay is here my friend, but it was written by me as you can see from this comment.I remain unconcerned
- 04/07/2004
- 09:44:20
- Score: 18 out of 21 people found this comment useful.
This is a far more complex process than I would have thought.You have written an interesting and enjoyable essay
- 22/06/2004
- 10:44:49
- Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
I know next to nothing about this process, so found this extremely interesting. The sub headings at the beginning are not corresponded to in to main body, making it a little confusing.Who would have thought of this use for left over emulsion?
- 22/06/2004
- 10:35:34
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I am unsure whether you have plagiarized this essay or submitted it to two sites as it can also be found herehttp://www.antiessays.com/essay.php?eid=1335
- 22/06/2004
- 10:14:32
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
You have obviously carried out a good deal of research for this essay. It would be interesting to see the bibliography.Whereas I am not in complete agreement with all you say, this is cogent and well written work.
- 22/06/2004
- 07:45:55
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
This is an extremely interesting piece. I would like to see the bibliography.Domestic Violence has no excuse, and I am also appalled by the increase of incidents involving women assaulting men.Equality is a partnership, and the thought ofwomen taking on the poor qualities previously associated with men is extremely shocking
- 20/06/2004
- 19:41:37
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
This is excellant work for 8th grade
- 20/06/2004
- 11:52:16
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Does a story have to have a moral. Is there a rule that says this somewhere?It was stated right at the beginning that this was a scary story, so by choosing to read on you have effectively elected to accept the possibllity of being disturbed by the content. Awful and horrible would be taken as a compliment in that context.
- 19/06/2004
- 11:54:14
- Score: 13 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
This is scary stuff. You have obviously done your research. I would have liked to see a list of the sources used.
- 19/06/2004
- 10:46:10
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
The stereotype of the wealthy Jew has been proved to be a dangerous one. It was used by the Nazi's to justify the initial actions of the reich and degenerated into the holocaust. It was rumours of their riches (again said at the expense of others) that led them to be starved to death in York.Also this essay requires a lot more consideration. If you are explaining this to someone who knows nothing of the Jewish race or religion they would not be enlightened.
- 19/06/2004
- 09:47:11
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
I can see what you are saying here, but I would have loved to read more detail in the comparison
- 19/06/2004
- 09:38:07
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
What a forceful piece of writing. You obviously feel very strongly on the subject.This is a rallying cry.There is a poem by Charlotte Perkins Gilman called 'the obstacle'. Essentially the obstacle is as big as you make it. This essay seems to be recognising the size of the obstacle, which those women who have achieved high status, for example, Margaret Thatcher have refused to do. I do believe that women in many countries are seriously oppressed and that is a human rights issue, however much of what you describe is an equal rights issue. As a woman in a western democracy, with a senior job in a male orientated industry that obstacle is as big as I choose to view it, and in Gilmans words, I prefer to 'walk directly through him, as if he wasn't there'. In doing so I clear a path for the next woman.
- 19/06/2004
- 09:18:17
- Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
It is worth remembering that this is a comedy. Playfulness abounds throughout the play and at the end the feeling is not that she has given up but that they will have a strong and loving partnership. There is a mutual element to this.
- 19/06/2004
- 08:59:40
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This was a very good essay on a worrying trend. You have obviously researched this well and written fluently and with interest
- 19/06/2004
- 08:46:04
- Score: 24 out of 24 people found this comment useful.
I was glad to see that you have included the reference to war in your account. It is easy to forget that the Terror took place in a country under seige. To forget this is akin to saying that everyone in England went insane in 1944 and started blacking out windows,sleeping in Underground stations and sailing across to Normandy to shoot people on the beach for no apparent reason.
- 19/06/2004
- 08:35:28
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This is an excellant account of events with a flair for the gruesome details.
- 19/06/2004
- 08:17:47
- Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I find it a little difficult to see how she could be regarded as thrifty bearing in mind that in 1785 she bought a necklace for 1,600,000 francs, she ran up debts of 500,000livres and then proceded to spent a further 400,000 on bracelets. As for reduction of staff, I would think that 300 chefs as they are recorded as keeping would be enough for anyone!
- 19/06/2004
- 07:50:34
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This was an interesting essay to read about a man who is renown for a lack of emotion.He once wrote to a friend:' Every moment since my arrival has been devoted to pleasure. Ever since Saturday I have eaten tart. What a temptation to spend the night eating even more!'You will be delighted to know that he managed to curb this excess by 'reflecting upon the beauty of mastering ones passions'. What a party animal!Just one pointthough. You write that'On the twenty seventh of July, he tried to shoot himself and missed.'There is a policemans report where the officer admitted to shooting Robespierre, claiming that he had aimed for his chest, but missed and the bullet shattered his jaw.
- 19/06/2004
- 07:35:13
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
'So the next time you see a smoker next to you, oppress the annoyment and try to experience the joy of living, together with him.'Because lets face it, If he continues to smoke, he wont be experiencing the 'joy of living' for too long to come!
- 18/06/2004
- 15:51:53
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Your grasp of the technicalities is excellant. I may require a tutorial from you. I personally thought that there were two speakers in 'The Schoolboy'. It just shows how different people interpret the poem differently.
- 18/06/2004
- 13:47:16
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Thank you for your comment Dizzy, I have just read your essay and have to say that dealing with them both in tandem means your essay flows better.Johnjjp, Thank you for your comment. I admit that the friend who now proof reads my essays is beyond price and would shun renueration for this labour of love!
- 18/06/2004
- 13:38:55
- Score: 19 out of 20 people found this comment useful.
Your essay also precludes cartoons fairy tales games and everything else, because by this logic children do not deserve to have fun, they should be learning about sexually transmitted diseases.There are so many nasty things that a parent has to teach their inquisitive and friendly four year old....stranger danger, other kids can be nasty but that doesnt mean you are bad. What is wrong with keeping a fun GAME going that provides presents? I can see what you are saying, but you are applying that to you as you are now, not to a small child. Is it so damaging to believe in safety and magic?
- 17/06/2004
- 16:45:43
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
I would recommend you read the poem to appreciate its chilling sublety. Johnjjp's conclusion was actually quite forceful. When writing of a poet like Browning it is so easy to become as (I really cant think of the word as evasive doesnt quite capture it)as the author. It is necessary to pin down what can be behind the subtle mask of seeming reason, rather than be seduced by it (See My Last Duchess.) In that respect I would have to disagree.
- 17/06/2004
- 16:31:58
- Score: 45 out of 47 people found this comment useful.
I am a little confused here and so will reserve grading until I am a little clearer.Is this voicing your oppinion?Is this a monologue by a created character.It is submitted under creative writing and there lies my confusion.
- 17/06/2004
- 16:10:07
- Score: 14 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
'Paine returned to England in 1787 to raise funds for a bridge he had designed'tIt always amuses me that he couldnt quite raise enough money to build it over anything so for years there was a totally pointless bridge in a field in Paddington.Your essay could be misread with regard to his imprisonment which actually ook place in France during the 'terror' where he luckily escaped the guillotine.Mark Steel the historian and comedian described him as a man of whom'...if you went to a concert with him, somehow by the end of the evening he'd be on stage playing lead guitar with Bruce Springsteen'
- 13/06/2004
- 15:13:46
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
When plastic surgery first started out it had the high aspirations that are being touted for genetic engineering. The result now is that surgery is a vanity excercise for many. I fear this may also be the case here, in time perhaps nindividuality of looks, intelligence and skill may become a thing of the past and that is an extremely sad thought.
- 13/06/2004
- 14:38:45
- Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
This reads very well. Rather than a dry biography, you have enthused this with your obvious respect and rendered this a tribute.
- 12/06/2004
- 06:39:22
- Score: 11 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
I agree with many of your points, however I for one certainly wouldnt advocate a return to times when a spouse would remain in an abusive marriage because divorce and its consequences were deemed to be worse.Most people enter into a marriage believing it is for life, and if sadly it does not last, many are left with severe depression. The divorce itself may be easier to obtain, but the ramifications may go on for a long time, particularly when children are involved.The divorce rate is so high not just because it has become another 'disposable' .
- 12/06/2004
- 05:59:53
- Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
This is such an interesting essay,the personal touch is extremely effective.I know that there is a problem with how the media portray the 'body beautiful', but there is also a tendency to blame the media entirely for these problems. If this was the case then everyone would suffer from this disease and this is patently not the case. There is a self-esteem issue here, which makes an individual doubt themselves to such an extent as not to view the media critically. The media may be a contributing factor, but it certainly cannot held to be a sole cause.
- 12/06/2004
- 05:48:08
- Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
This was an extremely well-structured and readable piece of work. It was also well observed and researched
- 11/06/2004
- 12:40:47
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
I am ashamed to say that my grasp of grammar is extremely poor. This is partly due to the fact that I was never taught the correct forms at school. This is clear and well written. I like the tip about putting the pronoun in bold font. I shall be another devotee of the practice.
- 11/06/2004
- 12:35:32
- Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
I enjoyed reading this essay. You have made valid points and have chosen good quotes to back them up.
- 11/06/2004
- 09:51:24
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
Great opening. It really caught my interest. What an interesting man.Just one thing.....What did he say that morning?
- 11/06/2004
- 09:47:38
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
This is an excellant esaay. The new move of companies realising that to supply a product or service once is not enough is something I personally welcome (not least because it has provided me with a job.) If a customer has trust in a company they will recommend it to others as well as return themselves. If they feel they have been treated shabbily or lied to they will tell every one of their friends who will then tell others who may consider using that company. One customer who is unsatisfied can prevent up to two hundred future transactions, and lets face it. Thats a lot of money to wave goodbye to.
- 11/06/2004
- 08:46:02
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
I am confused by the inclusion of Keats in this eassay. In general I find it disordered and in need of revision
- 10/06/2004
- 19:13:55
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
You show a good understanding of the subject. I would have liked to see a little more detail on both Pavlov and Skinners work
- 10/06/2004
- 19:06:34
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
You have shown excellant awareness of the factors which can serve to make study difficult. As someone with two very small children and employment, study becomes a catch what you can where you can affair. In his book 'on writing' Stephen King says he never goes anywhere without a book so he can read even if he has only two minutes spare. I even take my book to the chinese takeaway, so I can study while awaiting my order.
- 10/06/2004
- 18:52:48
- Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
You made some excellant points here, but you have not used quotes, and therefore have not used evidence
- 10/06/2004
- 18:28:51
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
I couldnt agree more John. One of the most beautiful women in the world inside and out had the following to say on the subject of beauty tips.For attractive lips, speak words of kindness.For lovely eyes, seek out the good in people.For a slim figure, share your food with the hungry.For beautiful hair, let a child run his or her fingers through it once a day.For poise, walk with the knowledge you'll never walk alone.People, even more than things, have to be restored, renewed, revived, reclaimed, and redeemed; never throw out anybody.Remember, If you ever need a helping hand, you'll find one at the end of your arm.As you grow older, you will discover that you have two hands, one for helping yourself, the other for helping others.The beauty of a woman is not in the clothes she wears, the figure that she carries, or the way she combs her hair.The beauty of a woman must be seen from in her eyes, because that is the doorway to her heart, the place where love resides.The beauty of a woman is not in a facial mole, but true beauty in a woman is reflected in her soulAudrey Hepburn
- 10/06/2004
- 18:14:35
- Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
Unlike retrieving news from the internet, newspapers have a 'touchy feely' quality and many people actually claim that one of the greatest pleasures in life is to spread the Sunday Papers out on the bed. They have an instant portability allowing them to be read on the train, in the park....and at the end of all that you have something to put your fish n chips in. May they continue forever!
- 10/06/2004
- 18:01:52
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
Many many years ago, when I was doing what was then called my O'Levels, I found that I could not enjoy a certain Graham Greene book that the teacher made me read. So I saw this book on the syllabus and read it. One of the best decisions I ever made. This is a clear and focused piece of work. You have made your points well and although I would have liked to see a few more quotes I agree with what you have said
- 10/06/2004
- 17:55:11
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
This essay omits to mention a vital part of how Dahmer thought. He admitted himself that his greatest fear was that of abandonment. He killed to keep his victim. In his twisted mind this actually formed a relationship. When he drilled the hole it was not only because he wanted to keep his victim passive, but primarily to simply keep him. To be quite sure that this person would never leave him. He ate parts of his victims because he sincerely believed that this represented keeping that person once it became necessary to dispose of the decomposing remains. This was Killing for company in its rawest sense
- 09/06/2004
- 16:38:41
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This is an interesting biography of a wonderful man. I am reading 'The Cat in the Hat' to my two year old at the moment and she adores it. His work has a timeless appeal
- 09/06/2004
- 08:27:25
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
This is a thoroughly engaging piece of work. I am so impressed by all you have achieved since arriving in the states of which you can be justly proud. And its great to know you are still smiling.
- 09/06/2004
- 07:58:11
- Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
This isnt finished. You have not looked into this fascinating subject in any detail and I was extremely disappointed to see that you have used references to very few poems and no quotes to elucidate your points
- 07/06/2004
- 09:52:09
- Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
I was very interested in this essay and you have obviously conducted a lot of reading and research. I would like to see a reference as to where you got your definition of what constitutes Romantic literature.
- 07/06/2004
- 09:45:02
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
But once again I find myself thinking that it cannot be that simple. What if the price of one individuals right to 'hear a different drummer' infringes on the rights of others. I can see the point you are making, however there is another side which needs to be addressed inorder for this essay to be sucessful.
- 06/06/2004
- 12:50:53
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I can see as the baby is mentioned why you would assume that this is post natal depression, but it is worth remembering that there are other interpretations here. Does her husband actually believe his own words when he dismisses her illness, or does he in not allowing her to speak of her symptons appear to be denying this to himself, perhaps hating to believe he could have married such a woman. He does actually in the story give his reasons for her staying in that bedroom.
- 06/06/2004
- 09:53:10
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This is a really good essay. It may have been worth making note of the symbols of restraint in the bedroom which her husband coerced her into staying in - reminiscent of a mental hospital.
- 06/06/2004
- 09:20:40
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I forgot to mention that this is a well wrbitten essay but it would be a little more accesible if broken into paragraphs
- 06/06/2004
- 08:07:46
- Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
In my copy of this poem there is a note which says that Blake originally entitled this poem 'Christian Forebearance' in his own notes. This for me provides an interesting view on this poem. Is it perhaps advocating a healthy expression of anger rather than to let it fester and become a poison in itself.
- 06/06/2004
- 08:06:07
- Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Pro-choice states that a woman is damaged by abortion'I think you meant Pro-Life hereMany women go on to lead fulfilling lives which may not have been possible if they had not had the termination while others regret that decision for the rest of their lives. Ultimately at this time it is just that - THEIR decision, and it should not be made lightly. Abortion should not be viewed as simply another method of contraception
- 06/06/2004
- 07:44:06
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
Ok aside from the fact that I am amazed that such time, trouble and public cost has obviously gone into ferrets in California, this is a very good essay, easy to read, l;ively and interesting (much like your furry friends) and certainly persuasive.
- 04/06/2004
- 12:56:49
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
'Since 1973 over one hundred death row prisoners have been released in the U.S. due to evidence of innocence.'. That is a terrifying statement.This is a good essay and I would have liked to have seen a bibliography so I could read further
- 04/06/2004
- 10:29:48
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Excellant essay. I certainly want to see this film now
- 04/06/2004
- 10:21:04
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Nice clear and simple explanation for simple folk like me.Thank you
- 04/06/2004
- 10:11:38
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Nicely written, but you take the approach of philisophy; 'philosophers have contended that the existence of evil is logically inconsistent with the existence of the theistic God. No one, I think, has succeeded in establishing such an extravagant claim.' - one way or another!'If not we are living very finite and meaningless lives. ' - not necessarily.Personal faith is one thing and philosophical argument is another.Please dont let faith undermine your argument
- 03/06/2004
- 20:23:24
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
tough call isnt it?As a difficult child in school I find I wasted a lot of years due to 'jobsworth' teachers, but the reason I went back now is due to those teachers (which funnily enough I didnt think liked me at the time). So I learnt that to inspire sometimes you dont have to be liked, but respected and that is earned.
- 03/06/2004
- 20:00:44
- Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
How fascinating. I have never heard of this. How many are diagnosed compared to the estimates of those who remain undiagnosed?
- 03/06/2004
- 19:22:12
- Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
I am assuming that there was a strict word limit here as you raise some interesting points which are not elaborated. Personally I have been recently looking at the origin of the species - Wallace and Darwin had differing views on the people they met. Darwin (the most memorable) viewed the savage whereas Wallace revelled in the differences. Whose is the more acceptable today?
- 03/06/2004
- 19:15:47
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I see what you are trying to do here and the writing style is very coloquial which could work very well, but you need to get your thoughts across better. Try reading aloud to someone.
- 03/06/2004
- 19:06:59
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
as someone who has returned to education after many years with the hope of entering the teaching profession, I found this fascinating. I loved the style of writing which conveyed the desire to learn and the desire to teach, that is so necassary. Teaching goes way beyond the subject itself and you obviously know that.
- 03/06/2004
- 18:34:45
- Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
If only life was this simple, but it isnt. Parents cannot strap an eight year old to them and be with that child 24hours. Children have been abducted from their own back gardens despite constant warnings from their parents as to stranger danger. What if its an unstable parent who is the abductor?.
- 03/06/2004
- 14:28:09
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
amazing what women do to themselves over the centuries in the cause of beauty. The same people who will have poson injected into their skin would be apalled at the thought of the arsenic and lead containt of make up from earlier times
- 03/06/2004
- 14:20:35
- Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
This is a great essay. Too little space is usually taken up with the brave Jewish resistance and it is good to see this being addressed
- 03/06/2004
- 13:40:16
- Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
This is a very good essay on my favourite Hardy novel. You have obviouslyt grasped what Hardy is trying to show through his use of symbolism.
- 03/06/2004
- 12:51:16
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
and this was written by a 12 year old? absolutley incredible!
- 02/06/2004
- 21:01:15
- Score: 15 out of 18 people found this comment useful.
I first read this over a week ago and didnt feel ready to comment after reading it. I have now read it four times and it is as disturbing now as it was then. I think you intended that. The phrase 'rip out the weeds' will remain with me for a long time.
- 02/06/2004
- 11:16:52
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
When reading dialogue, it only works if you hear the voices in your head. This works for me.
- 02/06/2004
- 11:08:55
- Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
I have little sympathy with a party renown for their racist policies. However given the fact that their agenda is clearly outlined and available in any library. It would have been very easy to use direct quotes from them. A lot of this essay seems to based purely on personal oppinion and therefore lacks persuasion.
- 02/06/2004
- 11:03:44
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This is concise and to the point, very in keeping with the subject matter. The points were clear and I like the use of words
- 02/06/2004
- 10:58:44
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
In theory it all seems so logocal. If only life was that simple!
- 02/06/2004
- 10:43:24
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
for 10th grade this was truly excellant. Wel written and constructed. I would have like to see a bibliography
- 02/06/2004
- 10:33:37
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
' just terminating terrorists is not the solution for terrorism' but then again if there was a simple answer to the problem it would have been effected by now.
- 01/06/2004
- 19:47:40
- Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
ok this is an introduction....wheres the rest?
- 01/06/2004
- 19:38:11
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I would have liked to see a little more on the divorce from Catherine of Aragon and the setting up of the church of England. The divorce placed England in a situation where war looked almost inevitable.
- 01/06/2004
- 13:18:38
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is very good. The structure is excellant
- 31/05/2004
- 19:35:57
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This is a good summary. It may be an idea to think about some of the themes
- 31/05/2004
- 18:36:55
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is a good essay. You may wish to break up the form a little. Some people may be intimidated by a single long paragraph
- 31/05/2004
- 18:13:44
- Score: 16 out of 17 people found this comment useful.
You have assumed in this essay that science and religion cannot co-exist. Many eminent scientists would disagree with you. You refer to Darwin and yet Wallace who also wrote on the origin of the species and was also well-known for his spiritualism
- 31/05/2004
- 16:53:20
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
There is very little actual analysis of this poem here
- 31/05/2004
- 16:42:41
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Children have been reading tales of monsters and supernatural for centuries without ill-effect. Hansel and gretyl were to be eaten by a witch, Little red riding hood is in itself violent and some of the bible stories are a little gory to put it mildly.
- 31/05/2004
- 11:11:35
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
this is such an interesting essay that regardless of othre factors It stands well. I need to see a bibliography please add one in the comments
- 30/05/2004
- 15:53:20
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
The birds sing .....and? we all ,know that birds sing, they can sqwark/ wax lyrical/call/speak/all sorts of things what do they sound like in your imagination?Again I see you - why the inverson here?. If it doesnt serve a purpose dont do itYou seem a little uncomfortable and therefore develope a refrain in 'again I see you' - its a lack of confidence that you dont need. You are good enough without it.I really like the flowers cycle and that of the grass, but the clouds are over-doing it a bit.You have real talent. Play with a few poetic forms, this is very close to your others, and please keep writing
- 30/05/2004
- 13:48:09
- Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
as someone whose grammar leaves a lot to be desiired. I would personally prefer to concentrate on what you say (very good) rather than how you type it. Having said which all constructive criticism in that respect is gratefully received.
- 30/05/2004
- 13:27:09
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
This is a good essay. I would have liked to see more direct reference back to aristotle in the main body of the essay. I am assuming the tragic flaw to which you refer is 'hubris'.
- 30/05/2004
- 13:25:02
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
Abortion seems to be the topic of the moment on cheathouse and given the wealth of essays that were at you disposal I am disappointed in this one. The points you make are only sound if you use information (properly cited) to back them up.
- 30/05/2004
- 13:10:30
- Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
You have produced an interesting piece of work. I would have liked to read more
- 29/05/2004
- 13:06:27
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I really enjoyed reading this. Your style of writing is such that I felt you were talking to me.
- 29/05/2004
- 12:54:03
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
My apologies - I mean to type 'giving more than one side'.
- 28/05/2004
- 13:14:48
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
This is an extremely good essay giving one side. Just one point about the rare occurence of an innocent being convicted. If they are in prison they can be released, even if you cant give them the years back again. If they have been executed they cannot be revived. Would the execution of an innocent person be murder?
- 28/05/2004
- 13:14:01
- Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
this is a fascinating and well-sourced piece.I know in England there are a lot of people who just dont think to get a donor card. There is now talk of assuming everyone to be a potential donor unless they specifically make the decision on whatever grounds to register against this. But as I say this is just talk
- 28/05/2004
- 09:06:26
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This is a good essay. It might have been a good idea to use the word religion in the title.
- 28/05/2004
- 08:43:44
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Excellant and fascinating essay. I like your use of quotes from contemporary sources. Could you add a bibliography as a comment?
- 28/05/2004
- 08:33:21
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Great examples used to illustrate your points. This kept my interest
- 28/05/2004
- 08:23:18
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is well written, and has a good flow. I would have liked to see the sources for your points though
- 28/05/2004
- 08:13:36
- Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
This comes across as very rushed. I am sure you could have used quotes and more detail to prove your point.
- 28/05/2004
- 07:55:02
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I would liked to see a few more details for instance on the correlation between the age of the mother and the risks. Also I would have liked to see a bibliography.This is well-words and reads very clearly.It is a good essay and very easy to read
- 27/05/2004
- 17:26:44
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
The basics are here, but they need full explanations and back up
- 27/05/2004
- 17:13:00
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
This was a very concise and clear essay on a very murky subject. As you say @grief is different for everyone' and there is no set way to deal with loss. Sometimes it can become a shelter in itself, a way to avoid dealing with things. Eventually, and sometimes reluctantly, we have to move on
- 27/05/2004
- 16:09:42
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
People get so hung up on what they havnt got and on aquiring 'stuff' that it can be so easy to forget how lucky we are for what we have.This was a nice reminder which made me think about how lucky I personally am.
- 27/05/2004
- 15:59:11
- Score: 12 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
I like the colloquial tone which is fully in keeping with a diary.
- 27/05/2004
- 15:45:18
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Everyone hates them and yet we never write about them. I like the style of this essay. It really captures the mood.
- 27/05/2004
- 15:35:44
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
This is a good informative essay. You may want to add your sources in a comment
- 27/05/2004
- 14:34:17
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Nice formal writing style and good points and good use of quotes
- 27/05/2004
- 14:29:16
- Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
I thought this was great. As someone who accidently cut an artery on some glass and then spent my time apologising to the A and E staff for the inconvenience of clearing my blood up, I guess I can identify with the fear. I even apologize to my hairdresser! Maybe I am just typically english.
- 26/05/2004
- 19:58:47
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
There is nothing really here to back up what you say and no real argument has been presented that will convince in the slightest
- 26/05/2004
- 17:21:02
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Excellant essay, had me reached for my copies of Gross and Hilgard's to refresh my memory on some of the experiments conducted. Immensely readable too.
- 26/05/2004
- 16:47:42
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
The essay is well written and it has obviously got people thinking and talking. What more can be asked.
- 26/05/2004
- 16:32:19
- Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
Excellant essay with fantastic insights. This is certainly not the easiest of poems to look at. If you fancy a little light relief I can recommend a poet called Wendy Cope who has written a parody of this poem which you may find amusing.
- 26/05/2004
- 16:10:29
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I like the story. I am not convinced by the use of present tense in this circumstance. Until the first example of direct speech, it reads almost like a television documentary, and personally I found that quite gripping, almost conning me that this could happen, but with the direct speech combined with the present tense it seems a little awkward. Obviously my reading is purely subjective and you did ask for comments. I did enjoy the story very much nevertheless
- 26/05/2004
- 16:06:06
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
This is an excellant set of notes. It has been many years since I have sat exams and I am extremely nervous about it. These should help
- 26/05/2004
- 15:57:48
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This is great. I see what you mean by it reading like a creative piece, but I can see far more how the children you told it to must have been totally enthralled
- 26/05/2004
- 15:26:05
- Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
This is a good essay but does require a bibliography
- 26/05/2004
- 15:17:59
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
You raised a lot of interesting questions. I particularly like the supernatural v psychological aspect.
- 26/05/2004
- 15:03:44
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Good common sense advice here and a good summary.
- 26/05/2004
- 14:56:35
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
This is such a tough subject to broach. Ideally it would never exist as everyone would be treated equally on merit.You have written a well thought out essay on a very difficult topic.
- 26/05/2004
- 14:49:00
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This well set out, well researched and you have named your sources.
- 26/05/2004
- 13:38:52
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is extremley good essay. I like the way you have taken two authors who have very different views in order to contend that the truth lies somewhere in the middle (for the majority)
- 26/05/2004
- 13:20:54
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
This is an extremely interesting piece. I have only two comments.a) It would have been nice if you had included a bibliography, particularly as you use internal citationsb) Beware of repeating one word numerous times.
- 26/05/2004
- 12:57:08
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This is well-written and kept my interest. You have chosen excellant quotes to back up your points. I would dispute the last sentence as it doesnt sit well with me to use just two works to make a statement about the huge body of work that is literature. If this is what you can do in two hours, you really must write masterpieces in two days!
- 26/05/2004
- 12:51:21
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is well written and easy to follow. I totally disagree with its entire premise, but that does not change what I have said above and I do appreciate this was written in high school.1.Many scientists today have extremeley strong faith and find that their belief is actually strengthened by their knowledge rather than lessened in any way. Alfred Wallace himself is as well known for his spiritualism as for his work on the origin of the species and insects.2. Many people with no faith whatsoever donot wonder how a window is made.3. There are branches of science devoted entirely to investigation of the supernatural.4. Physical things. Faith in phsyical things themselves has been questioned by philosophers.Well done though. It got me considering the question
- 26/05/2004
- 07:37:31
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
I like this essay, but disagree with your description of this as a 'lacklustre tribute'. Personally I read this to be a response to those poets using overblown imagery to describe their love. He is forcefully putting forward his love which is grounded in reality and without fancy. I would have liked to see a little more on the language used, but this was very well written
- 26/05/2004
- 06:34:05
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
what an interesting essay. I admit although I am familiar with the song, I have never thought about the lyrics in this depth. I shall certainly listen to it anew.
- 26/05/2004
- 05:50:28
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
How creepy and sad. Its funny but the death of his wife and child in some ways remind me of frankenstein where his small brother and his wife also innocents meet their death because of the actions of the man. I like the way we learn very late that the man is now so old, and the way you do not describe any other details of his life following their deaths increases the feeling that his life stopped then and he has been merely waiting to leave it.
- 25/05/2004
- 19:10:17
- Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
The detail here is apalling to read as it must have been to watch. I particularly like the way the pace picks up when you describe the attack, then slows in the last three lines
- 25/05/2004
- 18:51:27
- Score: 15 out of 18 people found this comment useful.
You may wish to change the title to include the word 'Othello' here
- 25/05/2004
- 18:45:17
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This is interesting. I know very little about her early life as we tend to only think about her in connection with Napoleon and her affairs.
- 25/05/2004
- 18:23:52
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
You have a good writing style. I would have liked to read more. Love the last line!
- 25/05/2004
- 17:52:36
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This was an extremely interesting and quite shocking essay. It certainly grabbed my attention. The information is clearly set out and the sources cited. I have made a note to look at this a little more now.
- 25/05/2004
- 17:46:18
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
I really like the way the pace of this poem is picked up with the questions then slowed again. Also a lot of ideas were packed in and came across without over elaboration. It assumes the intelligence of the reader.
- 25/05/2004
- 17:21:42
- Score: 11 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
This is a good essay on a writer who I feel is vastly underated. I always feel (particularly with his later work) that his characters are so easily identified with that we feel the horror more strongly. He is not afraid to use the most emotive situations such as a parent losing a child (pet semetary). These fears are those he holds himself.
- 25/05/2004
- 16:32:04
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Super essay you have obviously looked indepth at this sonnet. Extremely insightful
- 25/05/2004
- 16:25:02
- Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
Good use of quotes in this essay to back up your comments.
- 25/05/2004
- 15:40:44
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This is a good essay on the Iron bridge which marked a key point of the industrial revolution. Living in the gorge myself it is amazing how much evidence of that period still remains
- 25/05/2004
- 15:27:45
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
It is good to read a well-written essay on Henry's first wife who too often is accorded less than her fair share of attention purely because she managed to keep her head.
- 25/05/2004
- 15:21:13
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This is interesting stuff packed with details and has certainly whetted my apetite to learn more. Could you attach a message with a bibliography so I know where to look?
- 25/05/2004
- 14:03:16
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Personall I am against hunting for sport, but that aside this was a well written piece
- 25/05/2004
- 13:57:44
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This is a well researched and extremely well written essay. I enjoyed reading it.
- 25/05/2004
- 13:50:42
- Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
I am just starting to look at religion and this is an excellant introduction to the study of it.
- 25/05/2004
- 11:18:04
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
What a fascinating woman! This was such an interesting essay that it has made me want to find out more about her. Could you attach a bibliography as a comment so I know where to look?
- 25/05/2004
- 11:12:15
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I went through the school system onm Britain when the teaching of correct grammar was abandoned. This is something which has left me with a distinct disadvantage when it comes to my essays.
- 25/05/2004
- 10:22:16
- Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
This is a good essay. I would have liked to see the issue of peer pressure discussed more. Many smoke to 'fit in' with friends who are already doing so
- 25/05/2004
- 09:22:47
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This was a great essay with plenty of detail. I have long been interested in Jean Piagets theories of development
- 25/05/2004
- 08:54:04
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I agree with you completely. There is a world of difference between contructive and negative criticism.
- 25/05/2004
- 08:23:23
- Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I am assuming that this is the introduction to your paper and am looking forward to reading more
- 25/05/2004
- 07:44:21
- Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
I enjoyed reading this essay. They wern't exactly masters of spin back then, you would have thought they could come up with a slightly more PR-friendly name than 'The Terror'.
- 25/05/2004
- 07:40:17
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
It must always be remembered thatMacbeth was a loyal and well regarded noble. There was always a choice for him, nothing was ever pre-ordained like the tragic heroes of the greek tragedies
- 25/05/2004
- 07:19:13
- Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This is such a complex issue, which becomes even more complex when considering active and passive Euthanasia.
- 25/05/2004
- 06:10:16
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
What you have written is good, however it may be a good idea to give examples of each type of poem to clarify your points and to perhaps give some of the characteristics of each form
- 25/05/2004
- 05:47:47
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I am suspicious of mandatory community service. In england that is a punishment for wrong doing, and therefore it seems a little odd to force perfectly well-behaved students into this line. Voluntary work is to be applauded and perhaps earn extra grades.
- 24/05/2004
- 20:02:20
- Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
My grandmother had three children, a husband away fighting and during World War II managed to become a pyrotechnician. And they say that women today juggle with their responsibilities. These women went on to become an inspiration for the generations which followed and expanded the areas at which we could excell including the ability for a country to have a female prime minister.
- 24/05/2004
- 19:56:45
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
I must eat more of it! Seriously you have stated clearly what it is where it comes from and what you can do with it. There is not a lot more you can say on the subject and therefore it deserves the grade
- 24/05/2004
- 19:25:02
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I have to say I agree with you here. I do not see capital punishment as a deterrant, but as the creator of another murderer, but I can see Johns point. I always take the view that If I could not personally perform the execution, then I will certainly not expect or condone anyone doing it on my behalf....individual or state.
- 24/05/2004
- 19:09:38
- Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This is very informative. Self-confidence grows with a feeling of being happy with yourself and it must be so awful to feel so terribly out of sync with yourself
- 24/05/2004
- 18:55:53
- Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
I agree whole heartedly even if I do forget the eating part at times. The most important point you raised was that of organisation. Time management is the one thing that keeps me from falling behind
- 24/05/2004
- 18:50:54
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I come from England where Page 3 of the Sun newspaper is a national institution. Its a breast whoo hoo so what, lets go back to work.I totally agree with you.
- 24/05/2004
- 18:41:18
- Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
This is a very good essay, clear and well-written. I have been lucky enough in my career despite working in a male environment not to suffer this, but then I refuse to be angered by the odd picture or being called sweetheart - life is too short and I have better things to worry about.
- 24/05/2004
- 18:34:23
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
another super essay. You have provided excellant back up quotes for the points you make and your analysis is fantastic.
- 24/05/2004
- 18:27:28
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Great use of quotes and you obviously have delved deeply into the scene to see its sublety.
- 24/05/2004
- 18:22:44
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
some of this was a little disorganised, but in all your point came across well.As a mother myself I can confirm that it is scary and hard at times, but there is never a day without laughter in my house, but I also know many women who have never desired children and feel equally fulfilled (and have tidier houses!)
- 24/05/2004
- 18:11:49
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
The essay is well written, but does ignore one rather fundemental point. Studies show that the divorce rate is actually higher amongst those that have co-habited prior to marriage.
- 24/05/2004
- 18:06:00
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is absolutely shocking. This is very well written essay about a situation that needs to be addressed.
- 24/05/2004
- 17:54:19
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
Very few women who have made the choice to terminate a pregnancy feel particularly liberated, empowered, and benefited by their decision. You have given both sides and I particularly liked your point that abortion would still take place if it was illegal, but would prove far less safe. There was a little too much emphasis on victims of rape and incest who compose a tiny minority of the abortion statistics. It would have also been nice to see a bibliography with this essay.
- 24/05/2004
- 17:43:33
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
In fairness, I would think there are more than a few women who feel greatly comforted by the presense of Campus Police.I must admit that I am extremely impressed by possibly the only underage drinker in the world who can conduct an entire night of responsible drinking
- 24/05/2004
- 17:06:15
- Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
This is a good essay. You need to give a clear account of aristotles description before saying how Oedipus meets those points. You clearly know what you are saying
- 24/05/2004
- 16:07:46
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is a really interesting essay!I would have put in the title that this is relating to sexual jealousy.
- 24/05/2004
- 15:56:00
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
What an improvement!
- 24/05/2004
- 15:18:46
- Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
This is clear and enthusiastic. I would have loved to see this performance
- 24/05/2004
- 14:55:25
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
Considering the achievements of this later, I am quite certain she merits more than 144 words
- 24/05/2004
- 14:36:49
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
I wold have liked to see a little more detail on your points
- 24/05/2004
- 14:31:38
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
'Upon seeing Jane for the first time'...I think you meant Anne here. It is worth mentioning that when he divorced Anne as part of the settlement she was granted a title of sister to the King and lived her days out very happily in England.
- 24/05/2004
- 13:56:20
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
I enjoyed reading this essay. Joyce is is not an easy author to write on and in the past I have had trouble writing on his work. This is very good.
- 24/05/2004
- 13:44:50
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
As a big fan of Roddy Doyle, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece. I find his ability to create joy in the simple things as well as the hearbreaking and sometimes sordid truths are superb.
- 24/05/2004
- 12:39:09
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
You correctly identified that Macbeth was the agent of his own downfall. He was already known as a brave and loyal lord prior to his own ambition taking over, ceratinly a form of hubris.I like the way you dive straight in and the clarity of the writing.
- 23/05/2004
- 18:49:03
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
This is well written, extremely readable. I like the way it starts with an almost magical memory before moving on to talk of helping others.
- 23/05/2004
- 17:29:15
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
you have researched this essay unfortunately you have let yourself down when you expressed your personal oppinions. Point of record on your own comment; 'Hitler is an evil man that should have been shot' - I am sure you will be delighted to learn that he shared your view and shot himself! To call the Jewish people 'brainwashed' is an insult to them. Nobody can imagine what it was like for them no matter how we try.These detract from some of the good points you made
- 23/05/2004
- 17:06:10
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This essay mentions nothing about the emergence of a new class of middle class people 'in trade'. The people were not happy at all and once unions were established that became clear. There is no mention of the achievements made in this short period which had such a dramatic effect on our life today
- 23/05/2004
- 16:46:38
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I think this is a well written essay. You got your view across clearly and your enthusiasm for the book shone through. I certainly didnt think the summary was too long
- 23/05/2004
- 16:36:07
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
This is an extremely well written essay. You have a very good writing style which is neither too formal or familiar. The points made were clear and concise.
- 23/05/2004
- 16:30:15
- Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
What you have written is very good however you need a little more detail and a coherant introduction and conclusion
- 23/05/2004
- 16:05:46
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is a very good personal review of a brilliant mathematician. I do not believe it should be in the section Film reviews as the film itself is hardly mentioned.
- 23/05/2004
- 15:54:39
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
'just following orders' is a poor excuse to hear when someone clearly benefits from doing just that. Self-interest and self-defence are two completely different concepts
- 23/05/2004
- 15:14:20
- Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This is a well-written and extremely honest account. It was an extremely interesting to read
- 23/05/2004
- 15:04:51
- Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
You have obviously read the book carefully. It may be well to include a few quotations to back up your comments. You will find as you write more essays that you will become more comfortable with this. Good effort, although I would certainly dispute that the happiest days of Pips life were with Joe,
- 23/05/2004
- 14:52:03
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is a good essay detailing the full situation which led to the outbreak in 1914
- 23/05/2004
- 14:32:11
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I have always loved this poem with its metaphor of autumn to represent life. The quotation 'And fill all fruits with ripeness to the core/ To swell the gourd, and plump the hazel shells' has the wonderful message of living life to the full. I think threr are areas here which could have been touched upon, but it was a very good essay
- 23/05/2004
- 14:16:47
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
You raise some good points here but this essay requires some expansion and some more quotes would also have helped
- 23/05/2004
- 14:01:50
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Your questions:What plane crash? How did the plane crash? How did the plane crash?Here is the quote from the essay with the answers;'When he is flying in the airplane the pilot teaches Brian how to steer. Suddenly the pilot has a heart attack and falls down. Brian is steering the plane but he doesn't know how to land and stop. Brian flies the plane until it runs out of gas so he goes down and crashes on an island.' That plane crash as written in paragraph 6
- 23/05/2004
- 13:32:31
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
as a summary this is fine, but there is little in the way of analysis here
- 23/05/2004
- 12:52:43
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
This is written in a riveting style
- 23/05/2004
- 12:48:04
- Score: 2 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
Excellant essay and without a mention of the Bayeaux tapestry, a task I thought impossible!
- 23/05/2004
- 12:45:10
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
This is a good essay. I would have liked to have seen perhaps a few quotes from the man himself and reference to specific works
- 23/05/2004
- 12:09:51
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
You have looked into this in detail. It would have been worth mentioning a little more about Charlotte Corday as she did murder one of the key political figures of the time when she stabbed Marat.
- 23/05/2004
- 11:53:58
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. You have a great writing style.
- 23/05/2004
- 11:40:34
- Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
You show great enthusiasm in this essay.It may be an idea to have a look at your writing style. Phrases such as 'bad mouthing', 'bit of a nut' and 'sort of' are not necessary in a written piece.
- 23/05/2004
- 11:35:07
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
You have done your research and written a very good balanced essay. I think you meant to say that the guillotine was used DURING the revolution,as it was invented by a third estate officer (Dr Guillotin)in order to provide a more humane way of execution!
- 23/05/2004
- 11:23:54
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This is only 240 words and you have obviously not proof read your piece. Your points are not illustrated or expanded on in any way and to be perfectly frank it shows a lack of effort on your part
- 23/05/2004
- 09:57:14
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
This was very informative, and you have obviously considered the subject not just from a physical aspect but also the emotional element. I agree that sex is something that should be carefully considered, not rushed into. This applies not just to teenagers or indeed to virgins, but to everyone when they meet a new partner.
- 23/05/2004
- 09:50:00
- Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
you have written a good essay and have obviously read the book sensitively. Good recognition of techniques
- 23/05/2004
- 09:38:13
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Although there are exceptions, Erigone is the first that comes to mind. I would generally agree that the majority of the mortal women portrayed in the myths are held to be a sexual proze for the men (and male gods). You have obviously read many myths to come to your conclusion and have used good examples to illustrate your point.
- 23/05/2004
- 09:30:06
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This isnt bad, but it does require more detail and more quotes. You have not mentioned the tone of the poem or the metaphors employed.
- 23/05/2004
- 09:13:43
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is not anm essay as such. Perhaps it should be flagged as notes
- 22/05/2004
- 19:24:34
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
A lot of work went into this paper, please remember that the Jews were not the only victims here, gypsies, homosexuals, Russians, anyone seen as 'radical' and many more suffered the same fate.Also Can you imagine 6 million people? What would that look like? I cant. This is a fantastic amount of people and one where the brain just cannot comprehend. Given the Nazis tight control of propoganda it would be very easy for politicians to dismiss what was going on initially. This is not a defence of lack of action but perhaps a comment on human nature.
- 22/05/2004
- 19:06:34
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
It doesnt appear to be an essay or a story, although it is prose. It doesnt appear to be a poem although it is poetic. So what is it? I dont know but to be honest I quite like that prods the old grey cells
- 22/05/2004
- 18:55:55
- Score: 19 out of 21 people found this comment useful.
This is nicely written, but I was slightly dissapointed that more was not made of the Petrarchan sonnet' as this had such a profound influence.
- 22/05/2004
- 18:46:09
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
This is extremely honest and a brave thing to put up on a public site.
- 22/05/2004
- 18:38:17
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Personally I did not find the title at all confusing. I think you raised some salient points and well balanced accounts, prior to your concluding remarks.
- 22/05/2004
- 18:32:10
- Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This is well-written and interesting. You have obviously done a lot of research and I would have liked to see what your sources were
- 22/05/2004
- 18:16:12
- Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
You have made some good points here, I would have liked to read more.
- 22/05/2004
- 18:10:38
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
This is an interesting if gory paper. In England, Albert Pierrepoint, who was our longest serving and best known hangman, actually wrote a book condemning capital punishment (hanging was the only method practised except in military cases)upon his retirement
- 22/05/2004
- 18:07:32
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
I had never considered these two poems together and although I do not concur with all your points it has certainly given me food for thought
- 22/05/2004
- 17:56:32
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I enjoy your conversational style which makes a dry subject more interesting, and your flair for noting the more amusing details
- 22/05/2004
- 17:42:07
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
This is a very readable essay and your admiration for both professions shines through.
- 22/05/2004
- 17:34:37
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Although short this piece is very well structured with a friendly writing style
- 22/05/2004
- 17:28:47
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
You are spot on with your interpretation. Now you have to admire the speakers honesty, no false promises of later marriage for him!I would have liked to read a little more on the poetic form of this poem.
- 22/05/2004
- 17:15:04
- Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I enjoyed what you have written and would have liked to read more about the rebel.
- 22/05/2004
- 17:04:57
- Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
This is a good review of a fantastic escapist film.
- 22/05/2004
- 16:49:52
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I would have liked to see a lot more detail Like a lot of serial killers DeSalvo had a signature in the bow he tied around his victims necks, also more detail on the victims will show a profile.
- 22/05/2004
- 16:29:01
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This was an interesting and well written essay which highlights the hippocracy which Wilde exposes in society of that time. It always interested me that we never can be entirely sure that the book does revealk his name to be Ernest.
- 22/05/2004
- 16:19:01
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This reads very well and I like the way you have contrasted events which really throws into relief the terrible happenings in Salem.
- 22/05/2004
- 14:57:18
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I totally agree with John here. As with many overt symptons, the real problem lies far deeper
- 22/05/2004
- 13:32:40
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
What exactly is this? Is English a third language for you?
- 22/05/2004
- 12:39:55
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
I couldnt agree more, particularly with regard to Emma Thompsons performance, which was achingly poignant. Hugh Grant dancing in no 10 though is a showstopper!
- 22/05/2004
- 12:08:05
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
As someone involved in distance learning I was extremely interested in your comments.I would say, however that perhaps this should have been submitted as notes
- 22/05/2004
- 12:04:05
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This is an extremely good essay. It has certainly persuaded me, Your point is clearly made. A few more quotes may have backed up your point further
- 22/05/2004
- 11:46:37
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I would take issue with this essay, but am worried that my poor feeble female brain might explode
- 22/05/2004
- 09:56:09
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
I hope you are right. Unfortunately in Britain our female prime minister was more prejusiced against women that the males!
- 22/05/2004
- 09:52:14
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
This is a super essay. You have superb grasp of the book and it made me want to re-read the book
- 22/05/2004
- 09:30:39
- Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I liked this essay. It would have been worth mentioning a little more about each. Byron a famous man a best seller by any standards
- 22/05/2004
- 08:21:25
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Another great essay. I liked the way that you discussed the effect that the effects had on you rather than just sting them
- 22/05/2004
- 06:43:51
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Loads of quotes to back up your points. I liked this a lot.
- 22/05/2004
- 06:36:43
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
detailed and clear. Very interesting
- 22/05/2004
- 06:26:58
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Nice succinct illustration to your point
- 22/05/2004
- 06:07:23
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading your paper. You have obviously fully engaged with these poets and they have brought something to you. I really like this personal approach.
- 22/05/2004
- 06:01:19
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This is an extremely well written essay with a good balance in a difficult subject. Well done, I can not guarrantee I could have presented all sides that well.
- 21/05/2004
- 20:20:42
- Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
great essay. It is worth noting that the 'national assembly' became the 'national constituant assembly' There was also no mention of Marat the Rolands or the massacre on the champs de mars, but I have a feeling that a word limit precluded that.
- 21/05/2004
- 20:01:07
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I agree whole heartedly. King is vastly underated. His ability to ensure the reader identifies with the character in the mundanity of their character ensures we lkive the horror (and wonder at times) with them. I feel very strongly that as King matures his work matures with him and works like the green mile and the girl who loved tom gordon prove this. However that childlike glee in making his reader squirm never leaves him.
- 21/05/2004
- 16:15:24
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Do you not feel that times are changing? Nurseries are now under strict guidelines that children of both sexes are to be treated equally and more children now than at any other time are attending nursereries at a younger age as women are in the workplace and taking on higher and higher positions. Personally my daughter wears boys clothes which are then passed to her younger brother on most occasions, toys are not gender orientated but available to both and I am certainly not unique in this.
- 21/05/2004
- 16:08:48
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Along with the soldier and the prostitute, Blake intended to force his readership to think about normally ignored members of society. I find this poem extremely poignant and see the sadness in the 'matter of fact' manner in which these injustices are related prompt the readers anger rather than see it in the speaker.
- 21/05/2004
- 14:54:20
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Great details, but iverly descriv=bed. You allowed my imagination to work with your writing and that is great
- 21/05/2004
- 14:46:17
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
This is an extremely detailed piece. Unfortunately the format has not translated well to here and therefore it is not as clear as it would have been in your version. I would have liked to see a bibliography so I could read further on your points.
- 21/05/2004
- 14:37:42
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I was very impressed with your in depth analysis. Good use of quotes too.
- 21/05/2004
- 14:05:53
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I like the way you talk about secrets as being a tool towards deeper friendship. I like the way that it is the actions of Will rather than what he says that bring to the fore his loneliness, I am thinking about not the ploy of the imaginary son, but the buying of the car seat...the need to be believed.I liked this a lot
- 20/05/2004
- 20:14:35
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This is well written and extremely readable.
- 20/05/2004
- 17:37:31
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I like the repeated use of Brian as it gives the piece a nice rolling quality. I thought this was very clear and well-written.To answer Holocentauri's points - the answers are in paragraph 6.
- 20/05/2004
- 17:09:48
- Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
Using just the one piece of writing from Stephen King has distorted this essay in some respects. If we look at other areas of his work, he also misxes a great deal of humour with his work. King seems to take a childlike glee in his stories, revelling in gory details, which he admits himself came from his early love of Ripleys believe it or not, whereas Poe takes a far more sombre stance. Both men suffered from addictions which affected their writing. King's particularly came out in such works as 'Misery' and 'The Shining'. To a great extent King can be said to be character led as opposed to Poe who was very much plot led. If other works had been consulted this would have been more balanced, but then for all I know you may have been told to only refer to the one work.
- 20/05/2004
- 17:04:17
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This is clear and accurate. Personally I would have liked to have seen a little more on his writings; in what period, possible influences etc
- 20/05/2004
- 16:33:24
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Like Spoonman, I remember reading Swifts work a long time ago. One of my abiding memories was reading about the proposal for the eating of babies and while filled with horror, I couldnt help but admire the logical thought. I enjoyed reading this
- 20/05/2004
- 14:34:46
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Your close analysis of these poems is very impressive. i always find Owen to be the master of shocking the reader to elicit our emotion. The way words are placed together such as hilairious hideous give us a full horror and jar with us. This was sensitively writtenf
- 20/05/2004
- 14:19:00
- Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I may not agree with every one of your points, but I like the conversational style which makes this essay so readable.
- 20/05/2004
- 14:00:52
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
Forgot to mention I love the essay!
- 19/05/2004
- 16:09:57
- Score: 29 out of 38 people found this comment useful.
This poem never fails to give me shivers and the insight into the murderer who you rightly describe as psychotic is chilling. It is borne out by testimony from serial killers such as Dhamer and Neilson that they murdered so their object (I use that word deliberately) would remain with them. I particularly like the very slight creeping in of doubt where he says 'no pain felt she/I am quite sure she felt no pain'and also the final line.
- 19/05/2004
- 16:09:09
- Score: 72 out of 74 people found this comment useful.
What you have written is fine, however you do need to go into more detail. Bearing in mind that Vitruvious wrote on architecture you could use perhaps his ideas of 'commodity,firmness and delight' as a starting point when looking at the Roman Forum
- 19/05/2004
- 15:37:39
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
This is a good essay, extremely well-structured and clear. It was difficult not to think you were older.
- 17/05/2004
- 16:39:49
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
This essay was recommended to me by spoonman and I have to say. It is excellant. Would have liked to have a bibliography so I know where to go to read a little more myself
- 17/05/2004
- 13:53:37
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
You know what you are talking about in this essay and it is fascinating, but occasionaly it requires further clarification for those of us who have not considered the stories in as much depth as you.
- 17/05/2004
- 13:28:26
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This is a very good essay. I would have liked it, goven the title, if a little more time had been spent on form (but then I would - you have seen my essays)Just one point the sonnet is shakespearean - the couplet at the end gives it away although it does follow surreys form.
- 17/05/2004
- 12:38:46
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I would have liked a little more detail but you made good points. The writing style could do with a little polish.
- 17/05/2004
- 06:59:57
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
Very good for year nine, well written. I would have liked to read more
- 17/05/2004
- 06:56:28
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
James Beard is not well known over here in England, but having read this essay, I am impressed enough to look up the references you have included.
- 16/05/2004
- 19:00:09
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
nicely written
- 16/05/2004
- 18:10:17
- Score: 11 out of 18 people found this comment useful.
and you came to this conclusion in 600 words using selective evidence
- 16/05/2004
- 15:47:25
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
You are scaring me now, if Medea is justified in her revenge and Hamlet is not then I for one would hate to upset you!
- 16/05/2004
- 10:15:04
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You have written an extremely good essay on this theme. Ay some points it is almost like you see this as the only theme (I can identify with that). phrases like 'The monster is not born evil' - lets face it like any newborn He is innocent! This is worth the top grade.
- 15/05/2004
- 19:49:02
- Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
This is really good. I enjoyed reading it, as an account of how your attitude has matured along with your dress sense!
- 15/05/2004
- 12:28:36
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
You have a great conversational turn of phrase that makes this interesting, yes does not alienate. I will find something to criticize if it kills me!!!
- 14/05/2004
- 15:07:54
- Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
Seriously, this is brilliant. I so look forward to reading more from you and also want an autographed copy of your first published work.
- 14/05/2004
- 14:12:02
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
normally I never comment on spelling being attrocious myself, but here I really am praying you mean the morale of the troops in the last sentence and not the morals!
- 14/05/2004
- 11:46:38
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Ok condomns tucked into bras. I can go with that....not easily, but ok.What the hell is a cheeky index finger?. I have been wiggling said finger in as many ways as possible, buit sorry nothing even approaching cheekiness!
- 13/05/2004
- 21:11:09
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
aawwww you stopped. I wanted to read about the trimph of having done it and how it was tempered by that disapproval!just one thing....'womens anatomy' works well the first time, but on the second occasion you need to bite the errmmm.... and just say it.
- 13/05/2004
- 20:29:04
- Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
'A conscience does not force the person to do anything' -That one phrase undermines your point. If it cannot force, it cannot make in this context.
- 13/05/2004
- 20:15:26
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This needs a bibliography. It makes fascinating reading, but there are some alarm bells;1)Nevertheless, subsequent evidence demonstrates that racial bias has continued to influence death sentencing. It is a fact that a disproportionate number of blacks have faced execution on death row compared to their percentage of the total population. - Is this good evidence? Personally I would be happier if the no of blacks facing execution for a certain crime was compared with no of others convicted of that crime. Otherwise the comment is wider ranging than the issue you are commenting on.2}"A recent study of the death penalty in Texas shows that the current capital punishment system is an outgrowth of the racist "legacy of slavery." a very biased study - requires more proofThese are just two and they make me want to question the source used, rather than your writing.
- 13/05/2004
- 20:05:49
- Score: 18 out of 19 people found this comment useful.
This was really interesting. Thank you I have learned something (although my friends may get a little bored with me spouting on about it) Well written too
- 13/05/2004
- 19:22:38
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This was interesting, however it is always worth remembering that a) the mail is a middle ground tabloid well known for its conservative views and b) The Times and The Sun rarely contradict eachother (anything to do with the fact they share ownership? no cant be!)
- 13/05/2004
- 14:59:39
- Score: 8 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
I disagree with your conclusion. No matter what the position respect is something which needs to be earned rather than arbitrarily given on grounds of age or status. Good essay though.
- 13/05/2004
- 12:50:35
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
This is my favourite architect and you have written interestingly and engaging on his work.
- 13/05/2004
- 12:28:23
- Score: 7 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
This is a well written and interesting essay. The third paragraph is not quite as clearly explained as the remainder and I needed to re-read it, but this is good stuff.
- 13/05/2004
- 06:54:05
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
you have accidently submitted this twice
- 13/05/2004
- 06:36:35
- Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
Given the fact that this appears to be the 'hot topic' of the moment I cannot help but feel that it cannot in any way be treated in an essay this short. Having said which you did make clear points.
- 12/05/2004
- 17:33:45
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Have lived in England for the last 33 years and have never met a typical Englishman yet.
- 12/05/2004
- 16:51:55
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Lovely and clear!
- 12/05/2004
- 16:09:21
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is a wonderfully written essay. I would certainly dispute the final sentence when we look at competition like Paradise Lost and Frankenstein, which seem more rounded
- 12/05/2004
- 13:43:26
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Excellent!!!
- 11/05/2004
- 16:50:50
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
This is a good essay, but we must be wary about over generalising as to causes of divorce. Many people who divorce, far from feeling relief at having ended a mistake have a sense of abject failure and vilify themselves for their inability to do something that the media displays as so easy as to live and love forever. The fairytale can be a nightmare
- 11/05/2004
- 16:19:07
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This is very concise. It does make the point, however it could do with expansion.
- 11/05/2004
- 16:07:32
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
You must have had such fun doing this. I certainly enjoyed reading about it.
- 11/05/2004
- 15:59:26
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This was a really interesting essay. I learnt a lot. The only, extremely minor criticism involes; 'Rumors spread and World War II started. It's obvious that the Hindenburg was, is, and will remain the most tragic occurrence of the 20th century.' This is a little extreme and not in keeping with the carefulness shown by the remainder of the essay.
- 10/05/2004
- 19:57:45
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Given the sensitive nature of this subject, it is vital that it is backed up with references
- 10/05/2004
- 19:48:22
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is good. A little more on the nature of what was perceieved as the 'feminine qualities' during the time would have clarified still further, but that is being pedantic
- 10/05/2004
- 19:43:25
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is good stuff. It was well researched and well written. I agree with monkey that a bibliography would have been good. Also a little disturbed by the following; 'Often, someone with a mental disability will act loudly to distract the teacher or quietly to evade the teacher.' I can see what you are trying to say - that people with dyslexia (word blindness) may try to hide this with disruptive behaviour, but it is important to make things clear and less general. This is good stuff. I look forward to more
- 10/05/2004
- 19:07:35
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This is extremely interesting, I would love to know when did Cesare Beccaria publish? I also find the jury ruling on death or not quite fascinating. In the case of Dereck bentley in England the Jury recommended mercy and yet the judge sentenced a mentally ill person who had not actually physicallt commited murder to death on the strength of his words....\'let him have it\'. This is good emotive stuff
- 10/05/2004
- 17:26:49
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is an intelligent essay by someone who realises that sometimes there are no right answers.
- 10/05/2004
- 14:01:06
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I like the way this is written. It is conversational without being over familiar. It really kept my interest
- 10/05/2004
- 10:40:39
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I have read this through twice now and have enjoyed it both times. This is super stuff. I may come back later and read it again!!
- 10/05/2004
- 09:33:34
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Proof reading is necessary here.I personally cannot agree with this interpretation given the life and views if Coleridge, but each to his own as they say.
- 10/05/2004
- 09:03:38
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I like the way that the effects of these developments were noted rather than turning this into a list. I personally did not find it bland
- 10/05/2004
- 08:54:46
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
Interesting essay, do please be careful to put works in quotes as it can mislead e.g;'Thomas Paine instilled his ideas onto others in Common Sense'. It is important the reader is aware that that is the name of his work and not a statement from you
- 09/05/2004
- 21:14:00
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I learned something and didnt feel it was forced down my throat. Thank you
- 09/05/2004
- 20:59:04
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Lots of facts and well written. Be careful of unsupported assertions e.g 'Every Jew in Nazi territory wanted to emigrate' Not every one did. I know one personally who only wanted to be left where he was.
- 09/05/2004
- 20:52:50
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I like this and it definately gets best sentence award given a discussion on manhood; 'One of the most prominent discussions based on the theme of manhood is located at the consummation of act four.' to manage to get prominant, manhood and consummation in a sentence without smut is worth a prize!
- 09/05/2004
- 20:23:18
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This amazing stuff. I love your writing style.
- 09/05/2004
- 19:19:23
- Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
just had the result 93% so am fairly pleased
- 09/05/2004
- 18:02:53
- Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
I like this, it is informative and great fun. Just one thing I find particularly disturbing; You refer to 'lawnmakers'. What have gardeners ever done to you?
- 08/05/2004
- 19:26:48
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I like this essay. You have a very good understanding of the work. I find it fascinating that the name Rochester does not feature in the novel and yet the reader is aware of his identity
- 08/05/2004
- 19:10:50
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Well said that man!. Its good to see an essay that actually presents more than one conclusion and not a single 'cure all'.
- 08/05/2004
- 18:45:39
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
The argument is powerful and well researched. The writing flows wonderfully and kept my interest. This is great stuff.
- 08/05/2004
- 18:39:34
- Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This is superb, clear, well organised and inscisive. I loved reading it. Thank you
- 08/05/2004
- 17:53:57
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What are these reference articles to which you refer? Have you actually spoken to any working mothers? measured their childrens development against those whose mothers stay at home? What about financial constraints and the increasing popularity of the 'stay at home father'?This was patronising to say the least, and quite frankly badly written.
- 08/05/2004
- 13:18:34
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I was fascinated by the title of your essay, but although it is well-written, I was slightly dissapointed. I wanted to know and see in what way she could be regarded as a vixen and this did not iccur in the argument. To be brutally honest there was no argument.
- 08/05/2004
- 08:18:59
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I agree whole heartedly with John on this one. As someone who lives in a country that has had a female prime-minister, I can honestly say that the men doing that job now seem to be weaker in terms of handling stress.
- 08/05/2004
- 06:28:31
- Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
I like the examples used here. It is a very good essay, although I did think that it required a little more support for the other side. As an argument it rocked, but I heard only the one side.Just an example, but I have met someone who has lived in a polyamorous relationship (not married) for 8 years with two women in Newcastle and it works for them.
- 06/05/2004
- 14:30:28
- Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
Sorry, but you almost lost me in the first sentence. If you are reading this essay in a state or country which endorses the death penalty, they have to prove no such thing. You make a lot of statements, but without the references to back them up they remain unsupported assertions.
- 06/05/2004
- 12:39:19
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Well observed! Just one thing - If it was the autumn, the wheat would have been haevested. I like this painting, particularly the way the figures are so small emphasising that they are part of this landscape, not additional.
- 06/05/2004
- 11:46:58
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
You have obviously taken the points onboard. It seems a little unfair for someone to ask you if they should have been happy without a far wider reaching knowlege. Lets not forget that Germany had problems with a certain invading French emperor who was only routed in 1814.
- 05/05/2004
- 19:17:50
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Well written and kept my interest. The points you made were clear, Basically you are in favour of nurture above nature?
- 05/05/2004
- 18:13:55
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
reads well too, kept my interest flowing without having to re-read to guage your argument. Something I hope for myself ion time
- 05/05/2004
- 18:05:05
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
This is great, again something I have not thought about but feel inclined to having read this. Could you give a bibliography so I can find out more?
- 05/05/2004
- 18:03:16
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
The essay is well structured and normally I require more quotes, but not in this case. But a biography would be helpful here as the points were interesting and I may want to read further.
- 05/05/2004
- 17:14:25
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I was a little frightened about reading this essay being a luddite in this respect. This is excellant! I actually understood what you were saying. You have a talent for making things look easy and yet still dealing with it thoroughly. If I want something technical explained (dont panic I dont mean the birds and bees) I know exactly where to come.
- 05/05/2004
- 17:08:22
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This is a sensitive essay on a sensitive subject. You have shown both pros and cons and your argumenmt is clear and logical. Only a couple of criticisms; You state 'Some negative draw backs of becoming a stripper are the introduction to drugs an so forth.' This is not necessarily the case. Also when talking about the dancing affecting the relationship it relied on the hours. In that case she could have been working at an undertakers and it would have had the same effect, perhaps the boyfriends understanding of what happens or the sheer amount of money would have related more directly to the exotic dancing aspect. This was extremely good. Feel free to criticise my work - the more you do the better I get.
- 05/05/2004
- 16:32:05
- Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
I like the way you relate so strongly to what you have read and write clearly. Could you give a bibliography next time, so the reader can read the text themselves if they choose. It obviously inspired you
- 05/05/2004
- 15:00:51
- Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
Have two questions;1) You refer to chapter, could you explain this please2)Where is the quotation from? It is extremely interesting and I would like to see it in its original contextIt seems to drift away from the subject in your last two paragraphs where no link is made to suicide.Hope you dont regret asking for the comments. Please feel free to do the same with anything I write, can always do with constructive criticism. Sometimes a person is too close to their writing and is not getting their message across clearly.
- 05/05/2004
- 14:55:08
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
You obviously know your stuff! This is an excellant essay where you show good understanding of the subject. It would have been nice to see a few more direct quotes.
- 05/05/2004
- 14:33:32
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I like this. You have brought across the human side of Richard Branson. His initial ventures and inr to it deed the new ones are motivated by a desire to make things better and this is what has created his casual management style. Look forward to reading more of your work. Just one thing - you havnt included the reference to his autobiography in your bibliography yet you refer to it in the body of your piece.
- 05/05/2004
- 13:45:28
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is great and I agree whole heartedly with your view. If you had wanted to 'flesh it out' you could have used some more quotes to sow how Shakespeare subverts our expectations of the love poem, but this is to the point. I enjoyed reading it.
- 05/05/2004
- 08:24:05
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Someone gave this 84%?. Where do I start here? The rhyme scheme is actually ABAB CDCD EFEF GG (Surry's form)in spensers sonnet. Aside from that there is no mention of the poetic form at all which is disappointing. Sonnet 130 is my favourite sonnet, but again you have not done it any justice. Do you not think that Shakespeare is poking a little fun at the overblown language used in sonnets at the time, and in doing stressing how his love is rooted in reality rather than fancy?Where are the 'turns' and what is the poet showing us?
- 05/05/2004
- 08:12:20
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
This is a super piece which I loved reading. You illustrated your points well and it flows. Is there a sentence missing from paragraph 3? Given the evidence you have shown for all your points I expected to see an earlier crude marriage rate contrasted with that of 1998.
- 05/05/2004
- 07:48:07
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
No-one has a problem with you holding a view on this subject, but both sides of the argument should be presented. Also in places it does not actually make sense, for example you write 'Abortions are the reason why most women cannot have future children'. Most women can actually have children, please be careful what you write.
- 05/05/2004
- 07:22:28
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I like the way you take on board the views of society at the time. It would have been extremely easy to view this through what is acceptable today. You have used many sources and it would have been interesting if you had included a bibliography. I like the comparison with boxing as well. It shows you have a firm grasp of the issue.
- 04/05/2004
- 21:15:40
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I write from the UK where crimes involving guns are rare. We cannot get hold of guns as easily as (OK just according to my brother who lives in US) you. Kitchen knives are readily available and we are not in the grip of a chefs knife epidemic, so on (shaky) grounds I would have to disagree. However the essay is logical and well written and backed up well although would like a biography to read more.
- 04/05/2004
- 20:04:49
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
I like this essay but there is a major problem. In this essay you are using two sources (Aristophanes and Plato) to comment on the work or another. Why is Plato to believed over Aristophanes? Plato we know from the republic is hardly without prejudice and yet this essay appears to assume his authority. However the resulting essay reads very well
- 04/05/2004
- 19:33:56
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I am hoping that this submission is a joke. I have actually done myself the disservice of reading it 4 times - keep hoping it may have something worthwhile........no
- 04/05/2004
- 18:58:03
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
You have picked a huge title, unfortunately you have done so in a manner that seems philosophical, but isnt. Your assumptions are not backed up. It needs more detail
- 04/05/2004
- 18:43:03
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
I like your grasp of his controlling nature. I would agree with John that close attention to the text itself is vital as some of your very good points can be lost through a small error. I also feel that as the poem does not refer to the events of the time in a meaningful manner (personally I believe it timeless) perhaps the reference background events is unecessary here. I enjoyed reading this essay and felt you made some excellant points. John will never say it, but I can recommend you reading what he writes on the subject.
- 04/05/2004
- 17:21:50
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This is a great essay!, personally I may have deleted that first sentence. You did not have to tell me what you were going to do, because you went ahead and did it so clearly. Maybe a mention of the added effect on the women in the cities who also lost their children to evacuation, but really this is great stuff.
- 04/05/2004
- 17:13:33
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
I cannot argue with you at all that child abuse needs to be made more easily recognised. The point made is sound. Thes essay needs to be tightened slightly at the beginning, and perhaps more recognition of the cyclical nature of abuse. Looking forward to reading more from you
- 04/05/2004
- 17:04:43
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I can see why you had such a fantastic mark. You have shown great empathy and I think you have a talent for writing. Any criticism will be just nit picking, but hell thats what I hope you are looking for; Would she refer to them as nazis or would soldiers have been a little more realistic? The other thing is (this is not from a perverse nature) the soap. It may be a good thing to expand there as you are then drawing the readers sympathy. This is a great piece, you should be rightfully proud of yourself and your grade
- 04/05/2004
- 16:58:03
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I enjoyed this essay. It has been many years since I read the play, but darn me if I dont want to go and read it again!
- 04/05/2004
- 16:34:15
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
I confess to being a huge fan of the discworld series and this essay would certainly not have whetted my appetite in the slightest. Pratchett writes side splittingly funny novels and that hasnt come across at all. He shows the mundane within the fantastic. Please think about why something works when you read it.
- 04/05/2004
- 16:24:38
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I have a real problem with 'Most people feel uncomfortable around gays but will not show it'. Unless you make a point of interviewing everyone and then collating the results on this, please do not use this unsupported assertion.
- 04/05/2004
- 16:15:19
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
You have shown insight into this poem, however the change in language style within the body of your text hints that you are quoting from others. Please provide them with the courtesy of a reference
- 04/05/2004
- 16:05:47
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
You have shown keen insight here. The language used can be a little repetitive, an example of which is the use of the word 'prank' three times in the space of two lines.
- 04/05/2004
- 16:01:28
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
attach a bibliography quickley before John reads this
- 04/05/2004
- 15:33:38
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
I like this essay. It reads well and you picked up on the use of extremes. It would have been nice if mention had been made of the different rhythms and irregular rhymes, and perhaps more of the sound of the words. I love the phrase 'mazy motion' and find it reallys conveys that lazy but constant movement to me.
- 04/05/2004
- 15:08:46
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
This is fantastic. I love the way you have given it direct relevance to our lives rather than leave the poem in a vacuum. The writing is so tight, not a word wasted and it has wonderful pace. I love the the passion of this poem is almost confined within the villanelle, struggling to break free. Also I just love the phrase 'blinding sight', but thats just me being shallow!
- 04/05/2004
- 14:12:10
- Score: 59 out of 63 people found this comment useful.
I have really enjoyed reading this essay. I have always found the poem left me with feelings of uneasiness. Although the voice is that of the count speaking to the envoy, this isnt revealed until fairly late on and therefore appears to be a direct address to the reader. I always put mayself as the envoy and therefore at the end feel a little like an accessory toi this vain control freak and his dire plans. Having said that I always have been a sucker for the bad guy, and there is something quite delicious in the counts amorality. Thanks for a great essay, made me get straight up and read the poem again
- 04/05/2004
- 13:13:43
- Score: 67 out of 76 people found this comment useful.
As an introduction this would be fine, but as an essay in itself, this does not sit well with me.
- 04/05/2004
- 11:27:10
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I enjoyed reading this essay. You seem to have illustrated your points well and made good use of the sources. I do agree that a bibliography would have been nice. If I was being extremely pedantic, It would have been nice to see reference made to efforts to counteract this established practice. The interview and picture of Jamie lee curtis springs to mind in this respect.
- 04/05/2004
- 09:37:30
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
wow. What can I say! Thanks very much, as an admirer of your essays that means a lot. Will run around the room hollering in triumph <g>
- 04/05/2004
- 08:02:06
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
I found this essay deeply concerning. Assumptions are made without supporting evidence. The overall impression is a little patronising. No mention is made of extended family, grandfathers in particular. What about those with fathers in the military? All in all it lacked considered thought.
- 04/05/2004
- 07:02:53
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I enjoyed reading this essay, although in truth I would disagree that it is a masterpiece as I personally find the characters a little wek, but thats just preference. It flows well and you have obviously done your research and have used excellant sources.
- 04/05/2004
- 06:52:04
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
my apologies for the duplication. put it down to being new. I felt it was important to include the biography as wouldnt wish to be accused of plagiarism!
- 03/05/2004
- 21:48:46
- Score: 13 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
Well written and easily comprehended. Sources cited, all round I found it interesting (and naturally has nothing to do with the fact that my cousin was one of the focus group for the use of chemo a lot of years ago). She is alive and was the first of the group to give birth (she has 4 now!)
- 03/05/2004
- 13:48:01
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
are you writing about rape or abortion? My problem lies with the fact you have dealt with the rape issue and possible consequences, but I do not feel you have adequately addressed the subject of the unwanted preganancy cause throu other sources, say a faulty condom or a woman who taking other medication, does not realise it negates the effect of her contraceptive
- 03/05/2004
- 13:41:24
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
One word that wasn't there and should have been......'hubris'. Also you do mention the effect of Medea's actions on Jason, but what about her. Medea must live on knowing that she had commited the most heinous crim. She slaughtered (yes that is the right word to use) her own sons.
- 02/05/2004
- 19:32:06
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Personally I fail to see the rage in this poem and regard it more as a musing. Are there really any solid conclusions reached in this ode.Also I am intrigued by the use of the word 'haunts' in the first stanza and 'spirit ditties' in the second and the significance of teir particular useage.
- 01/05/2004
- 07:55:58
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
It is a large topic to cover and you were brave in your attempt. A little more reference to text would have hel;ped clarify some of your points
- 30/04/2004
- 09:28:12
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.