Throughout the time period that we have studied, I believe that there were three events that had the most significant impact on American life. Progressivism was the most important outcome from these years. Another major outcome is the Birth Control Movement. The Freedman's Bureau is the last major result from this time period. Between 1865 and early 1920's, the country changed from a rural nation to an urban one.
Progressivism is the reform movement of the 1900's. It dealt with people from the middle class who weren't immigrants who wanted to cure social problems. Women got involved in this because it was the only acceptable way for them to influence politics. There were many issues that had to be dealt with. The workplace safety was one of them. Workers worked more than 54 hours per week and the accident rate was very high. The solutions made for there problems changed the way American people worked and how long they had to.
Now, there was an 8-hour work day, there was a law for minimum wage, there were safer working conditions, and there was an end to child labor. The Progressives believed that you could use science and technology to solve problems. They also believed that schools were to prepare students to function in society.
The Birth Control Movement was another significant change in American life. In 1873, the Comstock Law was passed. This law made it illegal to use the Postal Service system for any article or pamphlet intended for contraceptive information or abortion. Then, in the early 1900's, Margaret Sanger began the Birth Control movement. In 1912, there was a column in the newspaper that was named, "What Every Girl Should Know." In 1913, this column was outlawed. Then Sanger was convicted for distributing literature under the Comstock law.
High Schooler? Really?
First off, I don't like your opening paragraph. It could be worded so much better, and just to clarify what I mean, I rewrote it below:
Between 1865 and early 1920's, the country changed from a rural nation to an urban one. Within this time period, I believe that there were three events that had the most significant impact on American life: Progressivism, the Birth Control Movement, and The Freedman's Bureau.
It may be just me, but I think that sounds a lot better. Then, you switched from past tense to present tense with the word is in your 1st sentence of your 1st paragraph. Try to stick to one tense. Also, in the sentence right after, you should have the word but between the words "immigrants" and "who".
The following sentences I believe are a sentence fragments and could be reworded better. "There were many issues that had to be dealt with. The workplace safety was one of them."
You know what, I can't retype all your mistakes. This essay is terrible, and if you are in the 11th grade, shame on you. Someone at such a level in high school should never be caught writing something like this with so many grammatical errors. The information sounds accurate, but the essay sounds like it was written by a 5 year old.
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