My best friend Radar. Descriptive essay about my horse.

I thought your essay overall was pretty decent. I liked a lot of the descripitve words you used. My only concern with the essay was the tense you used. I would look over it and make sure that it all fits together and its going in the same direction.

I had just happened to notice a couple of spelling and grammatical errors in the first paragraph such as "snoaring" which should be spelt SNORING. The Descriptive paragraphs were definitely good, but the grammatical and spelling errors threw you off. Very nice. 1/2 Smiley.

This is a good descriptive story. Does a good job of taking you to the event that is happening. Feels like we are right there with you because we can picture what is happening. Well-done.

Excellent formating and Alright Grammer you will be at the top soon just try to put a image in your head and proof read before you click sumit but i'll give ya a green smily face for doing a good job.

A short and sweet essay describing radar(nice name). We need more essays like ths. Wonderful experience reading it .

i love your descriptive essay- it really provokes the imagination and makes the reader feel like they're with you, experiencing the same feelings, emotions, and seeing the scenery that you are describing. there were a few spelling and grammatical errors, but overall, i really liked it

There are some grammar mistakes and lack of coherence, but this essay has a lot of feeling and potential

this is essay the typical descriptive essay but it does what it needs to do, "placing an image in your head."

Interesting story that is grammatically correct. Try to visualize before writing, this may help you iron out some of your writing.

the essay is very descriptive and provide people with the info they need. I believe this paper serves its purpose.

I like it the way you did. good job

well done, i just have to say i enjoyed reading this essay so much, it proves that writing can also make pictures. they say a picture tells a 100 words well with your 350 words your gave me an entire video, great

A fairly decent descriptive essay; non-direct and almost like a long poem. Many of the words you use paint a picture, but like I said it is more of a long poem then a straight-forward essay.

Pretty good, uses a lot of cliched terms though.

Not bad, good description that allows you to create an image in your head, but watch that grammar! Silly mistakes like that take away from any good points.

This was pretty descriptive but as others have mentioned your grammar could have been better.


Rule of thumb that I was taught to proofread is to read out loud to yourself, read it out loud to someone else and read it back words. Reading it backwards can catch a lot of grammar errors. It works for me, I hope it works for others.

I like this essay, although I think it is slightly repetitive with certain phrases. Overall, it is a very nice, warm, fuzzy, "feel-good" peice of writing that discusses the issue of human connection with other animals.

Well-done, successful imagery.

This was a decent, touching essay. Fix up the grammar =D

I thought you did a very good job.

Excellent formating and Alright Grammer you will be at the top soon just try to put a image in your head and proof read before you click sumit but i\'ll give ya a green smily face for doing a good job.

I thought your essay about Radar was interesting. I liked the fact that if you closed your eyes you could think about an image and it was like magically placed in your head.

Keep up the good work

Makes you picture the situation in your head. Very imaginative and poetic. Good Writing.

i hafta agree with what most people said before me it is a very good essay and with ues of ur descriptive words u hav placed a picture in my head. keep up the good work

very good story

I forgot to say in my last comment, this is in the wrong category

I enjoyed reading this- you're description gave me a clear picture in my mind. It was really interesting- I loved it!


Good job.

For something that was supposed to be written at a 2nd year level, the title could possibly have been slightly more interesting. Just a suggestion.

This is a really good essay. I really enjoyed it. Keep up the good work.

Was a typical essay, nothing special, just enough to make a visual image, needs to be longer

This essay is decent, but it could use a little more..."fluffing up" with more descriptive words about the horse

I love horses too. keep up the writing your really good