George Washington was born on February 22nd, 1732 in the Westmoreland County, Virginia. He helped shape the birth of the nation for nearly 20 years. During the Revolutionary War, he served as commander of the Continental Army as president of the convention that wrote the U.S. Constitution. In 1789, he was elected the first President of the United States.
George was an athletic boy, and he was tall for his age. His father loved him very much and gave him a pony and taught him how to ride. George went to a school near home. There is a minister taught him how to write, read and do math. George had a hard time with spelling. Nothing really bad happened to him until he was eleven. His father died in 1743 at that time George was only eleven years old. After that George went to live with his half brother Lawrence in Mount Vernon.
Lawrence taught him how to hunt and to shoot. George became a very good marksman. Even though his half brother acted as his mentor, it was still very difficult for him to lose his father as a young child.
The strongest feature in GeorgeÃÂs character was prudence, he never act until every circumstance, every consideration, was maturely weighed, refraining if he saw doubt, once he decided it, going through his purpose, whatever obstacles opposed. Many Americans wanted to be out of Great BritainÃÂs control. They wanted independence and to run their country on their own with out any other country behind it. Washington was chosen to be the armyÃÂs leader for the war. He was a great commander and finally helped America win the Revolutionary War. After this and so many great things that he had done, many people wanted Washington to become King of the...
George Washington Biography
Unfortunately, the writing in this essay is quite poor. There are sentence fragments, run-ons, word usage problems, number problems, and a good many other grammatical flaws that preclude it from being accepted as a very good essay.
To point out just two of the more noteworthy errors: "The strongest feature in George's character was prudence, he never act until every circumstance, every consideration, was maturely weighed, refraining if he saw doubt, once he decided it, going through his purpose, whatever obstacles opposed." This is a run-on.
"Diligence, brave, intelligence, combined with the soldier together, and the people share woe!" I'm not sure quite what this is, but it needs work.
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